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A Sensitivity Reader Censored My Novel – Guest Post by Wendy Voorsanger

Wendy Voorsanger ~

Writer Wendy Voorsanger

First, you should know: I didn’t want a sensitivity reader telling me what to write. My publisher insisted.

I get it. My novel includes plenty of provocative themes set in early California that might make some readers uncomfortable. Isn’t that the point of literature? It’s supposed to challenge our thinking. Stretch our minds. Create understanding. Sometimes, reading a book is an uncomfortable journey. But, we live in a time of heightened awareness around topics exploring race, sexual orientation, gender identity, ethnicity, and cultural backgrounds. And I’m a straight, white woman who wrote a novel littered with all of the above.

Still, I didn’t see the point in having a sensitivity reader censor me. After all, I consider myself a sensitive writer. I care deeply about racial justice and gender equality, and my heart aches at the suffering in America today. Plus, I’d already vetted my novel through a slew of diverse early readers who’d gifted me with incredible insight into particular perspectives I couldn’t understand firsthand.

In writing my novel, I’d hoped to shatter the negative stereotypes ingrained into the American collective consciousness about the Old West through dime-store pulp fiction and cheesy Western movies. The violent Native American. The Mexican bandito. The Asian cook. The heroic cowboy. And the desperate, helpless woman waiting on a white man to rescue her. Through all my research on early California, I knew those portrayals as incomplete and inaccurate. I wanted to create a more authentic narrative about the diverse women who helped build the West.

Writer Wendy Voorsanger Book Cover - Prospects of a Woman

But in this cancel culture era, I didn’t want to get canceled before my novel even hit the shelves. So, I folded. I emailed my final draft to a sensitivity reader and held my breath. Waiting for comments back, I lay awake at night fretting and second-guessing myself. What right did I have to write about a gay man, a black woman, or a Californio? Did I culturally appropriate? Did I inadvertently include negative stereotypes based on my own unconscious biases?

Turns out, yes and no. According to my sensitivity reader, my novel held no glaring offenses, but a couple of minor ones that added up to something I’d not intended.

For example, my novel includes a Native American woman whom my white female protagonist (Elisabeth) hates for becoming her father’s lover. Elisabeth refers to the Native American woman as a “damn Indian,” which I’d considered a historically accurate portrayal of her anger towards this particular Native American woman, given the situation and the timeframe of 1850 California. But my sensitivity reader pointed out that by repeating the phrase “damn Indian” one too many times to demonstrate Elisabeth’s anger, I’d overtly emphasized the negative adjective (damn), creating two problems in the narrative. First, I’d watered down the Native American woman into a silent prop (“the damn Indian”) rather than a distinct, particular woman. Second, I’d unintentionally conflated Elisabeth’s anger with prejudice, creating a distanced tone that some readers might perceive inaccurately as a character bias that all Native Americans are “damn Indians,” which is not at all what I’d intended. In fact, in a later chapter Elisabeth envies a group of Native American women swimming with joy in the river and wants to befriend them. Finally, by repeating the adjective (damn) followed by the word “Indian,” I’d unintentionally amplified the very negative stereotype I’d hope to reframe, possibly creating the wrong impression of author bias against Native Americans. Yikes! Easy enough to drop the word repetition.

In another example, my sensitivity reader pointed out where I might’ve inadvertently created an impression in some readers that I lacked an understanding of sexuality orientation. My protagonist Elisabeth uses descriptions containing harsh prejudices and biases against gay sexuality that a woman from her background and time period (1850 California) would believably hold. However, in order to avoid unintended authorial bias, I needed to illuminate how the particular gay character experienced her prejudice. Full-blown development revealing the gay character’s interiority wasn’t necessary. I simply needed to add a gesture, phrase, or short description illuminating how my gay character might’ve received Elisabeth’s bias. These minor changes clarified that I, as the author, understood the pain of prejudice against gay sexual orientation in the present, while my protagonist Elisabeth in the past did not.

In the end, I took all of my sensitivity reader’s suggestions to avoid slipping into negative biases I’d not intended. Is that censorship? If so, I’m good with it, because my sensitivity reader guided me towards creating a much deeper, layered, and nuanced novel, while helping me avoid coming off as an insensitive writer.

—Wendy Voorsanger


Wendy Voorsanger’s debut novel, Prospects of a Woman, is available now.

6 thoughts on “A Sensitivity Reader Censored My Novel – Guest Post by Wendy Voorsanger

  1. Super post. We can all learn from this. Thanks for your lovely blog Nicole. Wishing you all the very best for the festive season and beyond and good luck for your novel Wendy! Looks like one to add to my veryyyy long list! xx

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  2. Nicole, thanks for sharing Wendy Voorsanger’s experience with a sensitivity reader. Now, I’m concerned that my second novel, scheduled for publication in 2021, may also contain similar biases. Not all of our fictional characters are as open-minded as their authorial creators. Then again, for those of us writers who seek to ground our work in real historical and cultural situations, we owe it to our readers not to whitewash inconvenient or uncomfortable truths. It’s a delicate balance.

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    1. Hi Rosaliene, it’s definitely tricky. I had 2 slurs in an early draft of a manuscript, but chose to edit them out as I decided the harm they could cause a reader outweighed the context they gave to a scene, particularly as the character on the receiving end did not have a starring role or any agency to respond. I ultimately felt that they should only appear if perceived from that character’s viewpoint, rather than an outsider’s.

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  3. Just stumbled upon the concept of sensitivity reader about 15 minutes ago. Had no idea they existed. My gut reaction to the concept is superfluous, with the exception of non fiction educational material. Censorship is censorship, a slippery slope best avoided. Just coming from a reader’s viewpoint without financial implications. I believe that life and art is flawed and attempting to sanitize literature so that it appeals to the broadest base dilutes the essence of it’s individualistic beauty. One needs to be aware of unconscious bias and if not intentional, avoid its influence. Great writing stirs emotions that crest like ocean waves overwhelming the reader. Removing words or phrases especially ones that are accurate in the time and context of when they would have been used is in and of itself whitewashing the past.

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    1. Hi Paul, thanks for taking the time to read and comment. I take your point and personally think it’s a fine line to walk. However, in examples such as Wendy’s, I can see the argument for making the changes. Ultimately, I think it comes down to whether or not inclusion of certain details is adding something new or just defaulting to what are effectively cliches. Surely there have to be deeper ways to show a character’s dark side, or to accurately portray historical prejudice without simply incorporating slurs and such? If we’re speaking specifically about race, for example, I do think it’s important to ask whether what we are writing just perpetuates stereotypes or advances some kind of critical thinking, and if we are writing something that only one demographic feels comfortable reading, then I think that’s a problem worth addressing.


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